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Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-28 . chapter 1
Awesome comparison of blood to pennies. M.

My only complaint is that I felt this was too short. I was really engrossed in this; I wanted to know more about the conflict, the relationship between the ninja and the narrator, and so forth.

What did you intend, since I'm curious? Is the narrator possessed in some way ('My vision goes black and I feel my body moving on its own, in ways it couldn’t before') or did you have a particular horror creature in mind?

Just wondering. (: Very well done!
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