|Reviews for Not Alive|
| a silenced revolution 8/14/07 . chapter 1
Just beautiful. I love this:
"A wish glued on a star
Floating billions of miles away
Never to be grasped or even touched"
| TeaWithOnions 8/6/07 . chapter 1
I love the raw emotion you put into your poems. I can relate to it. I like the part about the china cabinet, and the stanza after that, "But there's a gag against my tongue/ (where your mouth used to be)." I love it! Cool piece overall!
| anders8 7/31/07 . chapter 1
Shoulder blades rubbing into dust
Of the people we used to be
This line is amazing. The dust of the people we used to be ... the idea of them being back-to-back - and then further exploration of this, the crafty pivoting and angling viz. the analogy of the china cabinet and the figure standing with the key; not to mention the last two lines. Oh, wow.
Watch out for grammatical slip-ups, like "your" instead of "you're."
| mizu no kokoro 7/29/07 . chapter 1
good poem. the vivid images, well portrayed emotions. well done
| A little birdie once told me 7/23/07 . chapter 1
I don't even know how to explain how much this poem amazes me! At parts, it reminded me of the novel New Moon by Stephnie Meyer, like when you described only having the voice left. And the little boy in the china cabinet is an amazing analogy! My FAVORITE lines are "Telling me it's all just a lost cause/ A wish glued on a star/ Floating billions of miles away/ Never to be grasped or even touched" Completely and utterly beautiful...
| whispered something profound 7/22/07 . chapter 1
aww so beautiful. normally i tell people what my favorite part of they're poem was, but this fit together so nicely. the last line is really haunting and i love it. "because we both know you'll fall"
| Stella Grimshaw 7/22/07 . chapter 1
Amazing as always.
| Her Wishing Well 7/22/07 . chapter 1
I loved this, I really did, it was so sad and yet so sort of sweet in a way. Made me want to cry - truly a favourite of mine.