Love it. especially the line "we would lock the sun in our hands". I could see it. Very well written.

It's good to know your place in life.

Excellent word choice and progression. I like how this has the specifics of action, and yet not the specifics of a named individual. It gives it that everyscene feel that makes it universally relatable. Well done. MD:77.

Oh, that is so tragic. Just heartbreaking. I really liked "lock it like lips/lock it like hips." The sound and idea there was really nice. Just overall nicely done. Keep writing! :)

Hmm...this made me smile--even if it only made me dream of what could be with someone. I sometimes remember with wanton greed my past love...but I know it's only memories.

Oh well.

It still made me smile.

Thanks.

-Tyler

Wow, that was really good. Great poem. I really liked it.

Lock it like lips,

Lock it like hips

ohh yeah
good work on this one, the feeling is written really well. :)

(Previously CaramelBoost)

This is really sweet! I loved the imagery in this, and the rhythm and flow you had going on. Great job on this; it was so cute!

xox Caramel

I loved the feeling in this poem. Beautifully done.

~midnightjoy

I love this! It's so beautiful.
"Lock it like lips
Lock it like hips"
Love Love Love it!