 requiemofparadise 2008-03-13 . chapter 1Love it. especially the line "we would lock the sun in our hands". I could see it. Very well written. |
 I.O.K.O 2008-01-17 . chapter 1It's good to know your place in life. |
 Moondog Dozier 2007-11-09 . chapter 1Excellent word choice and progression. I like how this has the specifics of action, and yet not the specifics of a named individual. It gives it that everyscene feel that makes it universally relatable. Well done. MD:77. |
 no.peace.los.angeles 2007-10-21 . chapter 1Oh, that is so tragic. Just heartbreaking. I really liked "lock it like lips/lock it like hips." The sound and idea there was really nice. Just overall nicely done. Keep writing! :) |
 Icicle Tears 2007-10-12 . chapter 1Hmm...this made me smile--even if it only made me dream of what could be with someone. I sometimes remember with wanton greed my past love...but I know it's only memories.
Oh well.
It still made me smile.
Thanks.
-Tyler |
 partingissuchsweetsorrow 2007-09-14 . chapter 1Wow, that was really good. Great poem. I really liked it. |
 S. Ben Beach 2007-08-18 . chapter 1Lock it like lips,
Lock it like hips
ohh yeah
good work on this one, the feeling is written really well. :) |
 The Cruel Irony 2007-08-11 . chapter 1(Previously CaramelBoost)
This is really sweet! I loved the imagery in this, and the rhythm and flow you had going on. Great job on this; it was so cute!
xox Caramel |
 Luna Turner 2007-07-26 . chapter 1I loved the feeling in this poem. Beautifully done.
~midnightjoy |
 whispered something profound 2007-07-22 . chapter 1I love this! It's so beautiful.
"Lock it like lips
Lock it like hips"
Love Love Love it! |