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| requiemofparadise 2008-03-13 ch 1,  | abuseLove it. especially the line "we would lock the sun in our hands". I could see it. Very well written. |
| I.O.K.O 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abuseIt's good to know your place in life. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-11-09 ch 1, | abuseExcellent word choice and progression. I like how this has the specifics of action, and yet not the specifics of a named individual. It gives it that everyscene feel that makes it universally relatable. Well done. MD:77. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseOh, that is so tragic. Just heartbreaking. I really liked "lock it like lips/lock it like hips." The sound and idea there was really nice. Just overall nicely done. Keep writing! :) |
| Icicle Tears 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abuseHmm...this made me smile--even if it only made me dream of what could be with someone. I sometimes remember with wanton greed my past love...but I know it's only memories. Oh well. It still made me smile. Thanks. -Tyler |
| partingissuchsweetsorrow 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was really good. Great poem. I really liked it. |
| S. Ben Beach 2007-08-18 ch 1, | abuseLock it like lips, Lock it like hips ohh yeah good work on this one, the feeling is written really well. :) |
| The Cruel Irony 2007-08-11 ch 1, | abuse(Previously CaramelBoost) This is really sweet! I loved the imagery in this, and the rhythm and flow you had going on. Great job on this; it was so cute! xox Caramel |
| Luna Turner 2007-07-26 ch 1, | abuseI loved the feeling in this poem. Beautifully done. ~midnightjoy |
| whispered something profoun... 2007-07-22 ch 1, | abuseI love this! It's so beautiful. "Lock it like lips Lock it like hips" Love Love Love it! |