I think it's really funny and cute. It could make a neat story.
You should've made it longer, though.

For the five senses this wasn't bad, and I was laughing when I read that you didn't want to eat it. When you write something though, don't put a part at the end asking people what they think. It makes it sound like you doubt your own work. Have confidence and let people judge for themselves what they think.

~Cirien Phoenix

P.S. Thanks so much for reviewing "Falling in Love With Faust." Unfortunately, the story will not be continued. It was just a one-shot and I felt it was ended best there. I'm really glad that you loved it so much though! :D