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| aferdeity 2008-04-09 ch 27,  | abuseI really liked your story the plot was awsome, the descriptions gorgeous and I loved the non-sugary ending. A little criticism... there are some plot holes where things don't make much sense. you might want to re-read some things. remember, though it might seem clear to you since you imagined it it isn't neccessarily clear to your reader. There were some grammer issues here and there but over all not bad. I especially adored Daklos, though his mate annoyed me a little with her accpetance of things in the end. Still, what most annoyed me was the fact that her name was mirietna? something like that. It was ok when shortenned to Etta... that sounds nice. but hey that's just a matter of opnion nothing to do with your writting. I can't wait to read the sequal. I liked the first book. |
| Lauren 2008-04-07 ch 27, anon. | abuseOverall, it was an interesting story. However, I felt you moved way too fast. I would have loved to see more background, more play on the different relationships. I really feel that this story was a puzzle missing too many pieces to complete. |
| Carmel March 2008-04-06 ch 27, | abuseThank you so much for writing this story. The ending was perfect :) Hope to see more from you in the future! ~Carm~ |
| Jeruselum 2008-04-02 ch 12, | abuseThis chapter is so sad! I'm lovin this story so far...one question though, why does Daklos always drink her blood? |
| princessmili 2008-03-31 ch 27, anon. | abuseahh, lucio is so sweet. i'm not happy (naturally) with etta and daklos' relationship. i really hope they get better. as for the solange and lucio relationship--well, bit hurried, yes (now that i know all's well (wink)) sigh, i envy u for finishing it...better get to work now... |
| Carmel March 2008-03-10 ch 25, | abuseHey there! I just wanted to drop a review and tell you how much I'm loving this story. Keep up the amazing work, and update soon :) ~Carm~ |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 24, | abusei had thought the story was finished! surely she wont be with this madman for long? update soon, quickly! oh, and i'm not impressed with her 'new man' |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 16, | abusei think its sad, but i hope there is better planned for the future |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 13, | abuseif u kill lucio as well, i shall never speak with u again! joke, but please don't kill him, its not fun to readers to kill off all the nice men |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 12, | abusei can't believe u killed him...i can't believe it... u know ur so heartless sometimes. i'm not sure i wanna read on... anyway, i liked the poem, but it still doesn't make up for what u did |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 9, | abuseX/Z i have half a mind to kill u. if u do not stop inflicting such horror on these poor souls, u'll really get it... anyway, i really don't like etta. she's horrible! |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 7, | abuselol! i really like daklos. i really hope u don't do anything nasty to him...i'm warning u... |
| princessmili 2008-03-01 ch 5, | abusehey, great so far, just was wondering who lydia was? or was that a typo? anyway, the other mistake i noticed was aposterphies (sp?) but well otherwise...now, to finish the story... |
| princessmili 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abusewhoa! when did u do all this? thanks for the review, can't wait to finish this |
| Isla Sangue 2007-10-07 ch 5, | abuseUpdate soon, please - it's amazing so far x |