Ever thought about investing in a dictionary? It might help with your spelling. And you also need to proofread because this is utter crap.

I as well call troll.

The motion is seconded.

I clicked back here realizing I once reviewed this waste of space on the internet and have come to a firm decision.

You, dear Damned Soul, cannot be a real person. You are a bad joke and I will treat you as such according: no longer boosting your hit count just to stare at a train wreck that may or may not be satire.

That being said, I must say this:

anshient vampyre lazir bems!1!1 OMGWTFBBQ

AHAHAHAHAHA!


*dies laughing and holds up a "Don't feed the Troll sign"*

Buh bye now!

"Her teerz were lyk crystal raindrops frum a waterfall in british kolumbia." um fyi colombia iz in brazil but its ok we all make mistakez lol

"cuz I lyk yogurt"

I ** LOVE YOGURT OMG. I think we're soulmates.

hahaha and u think u ken write lol u kant so stfu

Even if it's satire, it's awful satire.

omg ur a junyur in hi skool?? me 2!! n u wnt 2 studi vampyre and gothik litrature? me 2!! omg its lyk were twins!!

dis wuz such a kute chapter i wish it wuz longr!! rite more soon kthxbye

"It was dark. As dark as a blak pinther att teh botom of a wel att midnite if teh pinther is eetin blakberriez n drinkin blak cofee. So it was rely dark."

...oh my god. People, please don't feed the troll. And please, for the love of bunny rabbits, leprechauns, good grammar and all things beautiful and innocent, don't get suckered by the rest of this person's 'writing'. Please don't feed the troll. Thank you.

I was kinda wondering if you're misspelling the words on purpose or perhaps English just isn't your first language or you're chatting on IM too much.

I would really find this story much interesting if you were able to fix that. If you need help, I could fix it this one for you if you want - just drop me mail

~hiro

"It was dark. As dark as a blak pinther att teh botom of a wel att midnite if teh pinther is eetin blakberriez n drinkin blak cofee. So it was rely dark."

Those three lines just totally kick **.

-pb

The first image was really nice... then you went and explained it. You said your friend is proofreading these for you? Well, there is an improvement, but she's not infallible--there are still a lot of problems with spelling and such. You should definitely learn the conventions of actual language... Your stories deserve better than leet and internet-speak :) They'll sound better if you fix them, too. I'll proofread them for you, if you want.

I used to love writing things like this :) Fantasy is an amazing genre...

omgwtf clifhangrr!!1!11!!

I'm sorry, but this was so ** disturbing in so many ways I don't even know where to begin. Seriously.

@Foxy

Well I say she got a good concept... but I don't like the idea of using chatspeak in fiction writing, heck I understand singlish faster than chatspeak

now she knos hwo much he lvs herr!
gr8 sene
"stronge lyk a thurobred on steroydz " dats so
o god!
omg right Mroe kwik!