"You even smell like him." That was heartwrenching.

Trying to separate them. I liked that you mentioned that, because it definitely makes sense that Delilah would try to do that, at least in his mind. :)

I liked this chapter best so far. :) Joshua is a silly goose. But funny.

I like the story so far... I'm interested to see where it will go.

but oh lord, the accent. I'm from AZ/SoCal/NorCal, and if you want help with slang and stuff, let me know. because I'd be more than happy to help.

and generally, Californian accents (especially SoCal) are considered to be "flat" (unless they're valley girl). like the voices in commercials and movies. just plain. I dunno about accents when it comes to LA and gangs and stuff (because that can make a difference). but for slang and for the differences between SoCal and NorCal, I can definitely help.

anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing what's going to happen.

I adored the Rocky Horror reference, and I'm starting to like Delilah more and more each chapter.

Very interesting. I'm looking forward to more.