I am very intrigued by this story’s use and outlook on necromancy, it is always …… to see other writer’s outlooks on the subject.

There are some moments where the perspective changes suddenly from one character to another without notice and it seems as if everyone’s point of view is written at the same time, it could be a little more clear when the story’s perspective changes if you would use a symbol or insert a horizontal ruler when this happens.

Other than the aforementioned issue the story is compelling and I wish to see where it leads.

Interesting. I like Maerin, and the way she seems to have no idea what she can do. Bere isn't explaining much to her, but she still seems to be able to figure things out pretty well, from what I can see.

The way you describe the two kingdoms and their different views of necromancy (and the princess) are really interesting. You definitly make me want to read more.

Keep writing,

-Freaky