aw, is this about patrick?! it's so sad, but i love it.
my favorite part: Where life tasted like Chapstick and the only thiing I breathed in was Old Spice. And again, that was the only thiing I could smell. Old Spice, Old Spice, Old Spice.
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this was a little confusing, but really good and bittersweet.

my favorite was "Where life tasted like Chapstick and the only thiing I breathed in was Old Spice."

very beautiful.

a little...too simplistic. you should add in a little bit more detail, just so that the audience can make connections, because it's slightly confusing... otherwise, I enjoyed the reminiscing.

nicely written =]
-there were several particular lines that stuck out to me nicely, such as "We had mastered our photo pose together, and it was perfect-but we'd only done it twice" and especially the last part, "something had ended just as quickly as something had started, leaving room for another start." that was a great way to end it.
-my suggestion is (if you plan to edit this) that you might want to make the intro paragraph a little clearer. for a moment, i thought "you" was a guy, because of "We couldn't get you and Lindsey together," which I interpreted figuratively. =]