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| errorlieshere 2007-07-31 ch 1, | hahaha, i read the whole thing before reading your little note at the beginning. that's great. well for a totally random write, it's fun enough. if you wanted to you could really polish it up but i'm not gonna bother with any advice unless you really want me to. |
| Fractured Illusion 2007-07-26 ch 1, | "overwhelm my senses." overwhelming seems to fit better This despite its shortness efficiently tells of the world and the relations in this story. It was a nice read, though I wonder, if he knew he was a spy, why did he not say anything? |