Found this story somehow by accident.

The writing is quite good. You really create the place and the characters such as is found so rarely at FictionPress. I didn't like the word "sunglassed," though.

Also it needs a plot. This is a sketch, and as such it's great. The start of a story. But what's the story?


Luck.

How many times does this happen to me? Boo hoo.. Oh well, at least you get to SEE them!

I suggest variation in length of paragraphs for this piece. It is not kind on the eyes to see them this large, and all of them roughly the same size.

Aside from that, this was well written as well. Somehow I don't fancy it quite as much as the previous ones I reivewied (ie, my fav so far is the two pieces of too cold for march).