wow... u gonna make more?

Wow! I liked this! Please make a story out of it, it sounds very interesting.

Thank you for reviewing, by the way, your the second person to review my story and it makes my stomach bubble. :D

Not bad. But take out the stage directions if you can. Instead change the font or something to show the transitions. I'd love to see more, but try to cut down on the dialougue a little bit it's better if the story moves along.

Keep up the good work.

More would be appreciated! I love Mythology and this seems well written! Continue please! You have my support!

Sounds like an interesting story! I'd definitely be back for another chapter if you feel like posting. Feels like an action/mythical story in making.

I like were this story is going. Please continue!