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| cue.dramatic.gasp. 2008-05-16 ch 7,  | abuseI love this story. (: It makes me so sad. |
| Pione 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseMy favorite of all your works. :) |
| emotionless-stares 2008-04-19 ch 25, | abuseWhat a great ending lol. |
| emotionless-stares 2008-04-19 ch 24, | abuseLol Tuna Can. |
| P 2008-04-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseI always re-read your story, and every time I do, I get amazed because this is really a fantastic first chapter. :) |
| cherrypiesizzle 2008-04-18 ch 2, | abuseThough your writing flows, and it's nice to read, I get the sense that your story just started out of nowhere. There is no explanation of anything; magic, what world are they in? What ERA are they in? There is no introduction to ease a person into the story, and you just throw the reader into the midst of the main characters' problems. Well, I'm sorry, but I don't particularly care that this main character is suffering because of 'Adam' and that it's 'Jake's' fault. Because you haven't made the reader truly care about the characters and their stories yet...it's like when you meet strangers for the first time and are suddenly caught in the middle of a heated dispute of theirs. Well, you may give them a ** look and step away, or just sit there silently waiting for them to finish duking it out, but either way, it wouldn't matter to you. You do not care for them; their feelings, while you may sympathize with them, are simply something you observe and do not share. In any case, I know that I haven't read very far in your story and that I should read your entire story for a fair judgment, but I noticed all these things right off the bat. Remember, first impression is everything x) Anyway, I didn't want to give a flame so I hope you don't take my review the wrong way...it's constructive criticsm, which I think helps a person much more than exclamations of how perfect a story is. Nothing is perfect - therefore, no story is perfect ;) |
| candid 2008-04-08 ch 5, | abuseI just got into this story and I have to say I'm addicted. The dialogue and interactions are all so realistic. Plus, it's nice that the heroine comes off so balanced and mature-- a rarity among FP fics, as I'm sure you know. Thanks for such a great story! xCandid |
| PJC Macall 2008-03-18 ch 25, | abuselove love love it |
| little Sis 2008-03-17 ch 25, anon. | abuseThis could possibly the best ending you have written :) I LOVED it! Hooray for Caleb and Estela! |
| little sis 2008-03-17 ch 24, anon. | abuseI really like how you managed to depict Daisy's black outs/in and outs at the beginning--very exciting and captivating! |
| random2one 2008-03-16 ch 25, | abuseWOW! Your story was so good! I just read it all the way through and it's an A ! Great job on it! |
| chic rebel 2008-03-12 ch 25, | abuseperfect! :) |
| kimlen 2008-03-11 ch 25, anon. | abuseIt's done! It's finally done! *does a little happy dance around the room* Seriously though, this story was great. I laughed a lot and read much of it with a big grin on my face but it's such a good story. *yay for more stories* (especially one with Abe and Isobel) |
| vocecara 2008-03-11 ch 25, anon. | abuseaww! it'll be disappointing not to receive anymore updates for this story. really enjoyed it:D erm, when you're free, drop me a review? :) thank you:) |
| itse 2008-03-11 ch 24, | abuseloved the Adam Daisy banter in the ending chapter so cute and the baby staring at Daisy all the time was a nice touch. mama's boy (lol) Im hoping in the epilogue, we will learn more about Becca, see now I am curious for a story about her ;) good luck with grad. school you are starting this fall, curious when do the applications for fall 2009/spring 2010 begin? |