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| Circus 2007-10-03 ch 1,  | abuseYou know, no matter how many times I tried, I never succeeded in saying the name to the full number. This is wonderful. You use the language perfectly to create the young voice, especially the breathing. The best use, I think, and the best thing I've read all day, is "inhaleonetwothreefourfive and if mom's right and this mocks god / 'Bloody Mary' / exhaleonetwothreefourfive at least in blasphemy I've stood firm." Really well done. Came here from SA for your "Guardian Angel" story, stayed for this, and I'll be reading everything else here shortly. Thanks for writing this. |