I like this. It's sad and different from what I thought it was going to be when I started reading it, but that's probably why I like it so much. Keep writing. Please. :D

Beautifully expressed, very sad. There's sort of a detatched quality to it, but in a good way if that makes any sense. I like the subtle metaphore, and how you have to read for a bit before the meaning becomes clear.

oh that's so beautiful. *adds to favorites*