That's so terrible! (not the writing, the scenario).

Well...Great story. Reading your writing reminds me why we work together. because I'm not the eloquent worker of prose that you are.

You should continue this.

Well...
I know that you're sitting right in front of me, but I'm letting you know that I liked this first chapter. I'm not going to waste time with a long review until I read the end.
_Candice