I love your stuff, all of it! You've both got awesome amounts of poetical talent, my dears! :)

O...I love the word usage in this piece! The way it flows and captures the dramatic emotion in a way that flows from the tongue. Very good!

it was a little crazy in the beginning, but i like the rhythm of it! it sounds so angry...makes me think of diru or despa really...so much imagery of flames and hate and crispy things...makes me think of hell's fire and brimstone.

It was a bit hard to understand. I didn't quit get the story.

It was a little scary and full of suspense.

I didn't really feel the religion to it either.

Anyhow. Cheers.