I'm really proud of you for writting this!

I am dying to know what happens next! Keep writting!

Very well written. I am intrigued, can't wait for the next chapter!

This is a great start. I am not much of a great review resource but the story has it's heights, capturing my attention in that, is something that you have succeeding in doing. Very discriptive as well, the characters are well defined in my eyes, I can see who they are.
The only thing I would ask for is to give more information about Autumn in the begining, so that as the story progresses we can see how she has evolved from her life when she was on earth. But your story might just do that with itself during her journey, so I am not sure what your plan is, but keep it up. You are on the right track to me.