I hope there's more you can just leave your readers like that. Cause i'm not one to beg. *Dramtic pause* Please write more. Good job by the way.

Very touching story. You have talent! I think this is the best one I've read!

I'm quite fond off this little snippet, tho it is a bit plagued by a vague sense of airiness. The motivations of the charters are somewhat left to the imagination. Such can, however, also be a strength.

I'll look forward to your development in this, as you appear to still be growing in your ability to express yourself across a barrier in language. In this respect a good beta reader would prove helpful, but finding one who can give grammatical advice without interference with poetic expression, which is one of your strengths, might prove difficult.

In any case keep up the good work.

Cheers.