Wow, this was GOOD. Really good. And you're right, this isn't for the faint hearted! :D
Good job, keep it up!

XEternalXDamnationX

damn those pretty girls! ahh, i was hoping he would stab her, she would have deserved it.

Kinkiest sex I ever done read! But very nice. Strange, strange story. Good work, keep it up!

That's creepy. I mean the ending mostly. Everything else sort of felt like the past chapters, where it derived around sex that was completely last minute. But her being pregnant with him. I was like what the fuck?

Good chapter.

C.S.

Looks like someone has an evil vagina obsession...lol

This is great stuff, but maybe you should switch things up a little. The past couple of chapters seem consumed by sex and seduction. But if that's what the readers want, well, I can't help you there.

Again, great idea behind the story. There are a few grammatical errors and typos that you missed. Also, again, the dialogue seems kind of forced. For these things, I recomend a beta.

The transition in the conversation between Slade and Beamer: ["Yes, Mister Slade. It's funny, we haven't talked much since we left your cabin, but I can tell that you love nature too. Why do you hunt and destroy your fellow creatures?"

"It is because most of my fellow creatures hunt and kill humans thinkin' they can wipe 'em out."

"If humans are gone, then we could live a natural life and be free from their cruelty. Look how they treat one another."]

It just seemed too random, too quick. there's only one reference about "the game they're playing" before this. The conversation that the duo are having needs to be elaborated on.

My final concern is the last line of this piece. [He could only hope that the fat ass cop didn't eat all of his apple pie.] If doesn't fit within the piece or the paragraph. It's too distant and insensitive, especially after the "tear" that rolled down Slade's cheek.

But other than that, I liked it. It's got a great idea behind it.
~bp.

this was definitely creepy.

I had a slight problem with the dialogue; it just didn't seem natural. Maybe this was set in a different time or something but it seemed forced to me.

But it was so, so ridiculously creepy which is what you wanted so kudos.

i look forward to reading the other ones :)
~bp.

That was rather demented, I think I'll read on.

OK. I wasn't expecting that. I was thinking that maybe Jack would turn out to be the werewolf with the way he was calling Patty his mate.

It's a cruel world out there, but someone has to live in it. It's kind of weird how his plans struck back at him though. Sucks actually.

Neat short, it definitely was one of you oddest, but in a good way. For a New Yorker, Shannon didn't act like one. Being from the city myself and the moving to Rhode Island, I know that any odd sounds I hear that are out of the ordinary, I wouldn't go investigate them.

But other than that, the witch was interesting, lol.

C.S.

That really was, as in title, creepy. Reminds me a bit of Ray Bradbury, which isn't at all bad. You've got a great style! Keep it up!

Very interesting story. Nice work. Have a wonderful day.

~Twilight Starr~

For some reason, I am incredibly sad now. Even with this being such a good story.

That was a bit freaky how he just let the witch seduce him so easily, but otherwise, I like the story! The main character of this piece seems to have a lot of character and you make very good points with the witch's magic - sometimes, it is better to just be an oak tree. But I suppose it's the things that oak trees can't do that we stay alive for.