OO great chapter! you must finnish this story!

I can see you're one to jump right into the action. Anyway, perfect ending. I like your style of writing, and I'll be looking forward to more.

~Bloody Scars

Nice beginning, snatches interest, which is good.
and it's a good thing you're still writing, lots of people in this site have sort of died down the last year...
good job.

Oh My God. This sotry is getting really good!

OMG! so exciting! this is a great yet sad story! xD

This is a very cool story. I cant wait for the third chapter! :D

A few grammar error's but it's good! Keep it up!

Poor mum! So the killer is definitely in the house. But then why didn't he kill the mum? Hm...

lol, youve gotta put more in your chapters! the suspense is kilin me :P
Only things I noticed to change are:
U missed the 'd' off of escaped in the newspaper article
and you say carried away too many times:
"I must have been getting carried away, why would a dangerous psychiatric be inside my house? My mind must have been getting carried away"

Other than that, great - keep writing! wanna know what happends :)

bex xx

Good chapter, update soon!

It's a good start to the story. There are a couple of things I'd like to point out though. In your first paragraph you used the word "was" far too often, especially in the third sentence where you used it 3 times.
The first few paragraphs seemed very jerky. It seemed very This happened. This happened. This happened. This happened. I'd advise changing that.
Apart from that it's a good start to the story. You have Jason acting just like a normal boy, which a lot of writers (I think) don't do very well. I like the part where you describe the dark clouds crossing the sky. It made me think something sinister was going to happen, and so I read on. Keep it up!

Cool story so far... I live in a small town in Wisconsin so the part about the taxi was a little hard to believe but I'm really wondering what was in Jason's house.

:OO This character is basically like me. My name is Jason too =D

I don't pay attension in school either.

Made me smile as I recognise the story-line from our english class :) hehe, tis better than the one I tried to do so far lol
Nice mini-descriptions, and good setting of the story, cant w8 for chap 2 :)

bex xx

Neato.