Hello once again. it has been a great long while.

I am hesitant to comment on the structure of one's poetry, Arianda. Poetry is a language all its own, and is not easily critisized justly. To me, poetry is all about tone and fluidity. In this, I commend you overall. Your tone is good and believable, getting down to your thoughts of hope and a belief in your Lord. It's always strange to me to hear God (or Jesus, whoever you are talking about in this case and it doesn't really matter) known as a King, since he's much more, but there we go, I'm already commenting on things that don't truely matter.

I am not certain about your poem's flow though. WHile certainly easy to read and understand, some lines just seem a little too long when I read them. Again, perhaps that does not matter. Despite all the poetry I have presented to this site, I really don't know much about writing it. Whatever the case, I'm pleased to understand what feels like the peace you have gained from this. I am not certain who the other girl in this poem is; a a sister, a friend, or something else, and I suppose, since it was written for you, it doesn't really matter.

That's my oppinion, for what it is worth to you. I hope something in there reassured or helped you in some small way.

Remy