This story is pretty all-around ace. :)

I can see you've been asked this like twenty times in reviews, but what was the popular book you were inspired by?

God bless,
Chelsea

I really liked this--it's very good for what you consider to be an 'experiment'. I rather like the unedited version--maybe you could edit it but leave the original? :) Until next time...

P.S.--what book was it that inspired this? I may read it.

lol, that was really cute :)
I liked the ending, pretty funny.
Which book was it inspired by?

Aw, I like it so much. It is very cute. Can you please tell me the name of the book? I'd like to read it.

i love the way you ended with the bit about tom
it was funny

lol tom had to get a potbelly huh? :D and the title is funny too...how did you come up with that? i like the story :) it was nice reading it

I really love all of your righting. It's very good. I was just wondering though what book was the one you were inspired by to write this?
Keep up the awesome work!
^-^

A really endearing story, it had unique characters. You crafted the scene when she goes to his house really well.

Oh, this is incredibly cute! Great job, but I think it needs some editing or redrafting.

Oh, and Tom ended up with a potbelly and a wife he didn't love?

That's simply AMAZING. I love it. >.

HAHA.

"Oh, and Tom ended up with a potbelly and a wife he didn't love."

That reminds me of this time I went camping with my friend and her mom, and we went to this bar and there was this plump security guard with a bald spot and her mom said that he was going to be the future Andy. Andy being the - at the time - hot guy in our school. HAHA, so funny.

What book are you talking about in your author's note?

which book would that be? would you recommend it?

naw
haha loved the ending for Tom!

This was unbelievably sweet, so sweet I just may have a toothache :) I loved it, it was hard to follow sometimes because of the lack of dialogue, but it made it more special, unique. There's one lien that I think needs to be edited "She tucked forehead into the crook of his neck and just breathed him." Also, when she sits in front oh hime then curls around him, I think it needs to be made clearer that she hugged him from the back, it was somewhat confusing, and unclear as to what her position was. And her graduation, i believe could use a few extra sentences. Other than that, this story was fantastic. It put a smile on my face. great work!

:)

it is cute. ;)