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| blue-dan 2007-11-03 ch 7,  | abuseWow, definitely didn't expect the whole "bloodshot-eyed-Chris passing out drunk on the table" :S interesting though! |
| blue-dan 2007-08-13 ch 6, | abuseO intriguing! Nice chapter, i can almost imagine Sunny's voice throughout it all, and can't wait to see what happens next (esp. with Chris! lol) although the emerging plotline of the abusive father can be headed nowhere good :( |
| LyricalStandOut 2007-08-12 ch 6, | abuseI really like how this story is set up. The whole tone of it puts it in the main character's POV. |
| SnowsxBitterxHeart 2007-08-11 ch 6, | abuseWell, I am curious on how the next chapter will go. ...Snow |
| Twinkle Star Bell 2007-08-09 ch 5, | abuseThe structure of these chapters is definitely different. I don't necessarily like the really short chapters. I like more of a medium length but I do like the flashing back and forth. I really like longer chapters though but it seems short is what you're going for. Update soon! |
| blue-dan 2007-08-09 ch 5, | abuseO nice! I like your style, very interesting, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Love how you jump from present-time richboy to memories of Chris. I'm off to check out your other stories now, (definitely hooked! :P ) ~D. |
| beautiful.distraction 2007-07-31 ch 2, | abuseHm. Interesting. And cute. It's short though, so I can't wait to see what you pull of your hat for these guys. xD |
| beautiful.distraction 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abuseI like it. Already I hate one character and love the other. Which makes me want to keep reading. Which I will...now. Great job. xD |
| Cindy 2007-07-31 ch 2, anon. | abuseI like the story, and your writing style is really unique |