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| writingxonxwalls 2008-02-29 ch 1,  | abusereview game =) Very good job with this poem... I espically liked the second stanza a LOT. Like, a lot a lot a lot. Hahaha, I think you've got the point. They rhyming scheme seemed a little forced at "passion-fashion" but other than that I think it sounded great throughout!! Awesome poem --WxOxW |
| Angels Soul1 2007-08-11 ch 1, | abuseNormally, Im not a great fan of poems which rhyme, because usually people just tend to pick any old word and make it fit with what they are trying to say... but I have to say, this poem of yours stands out to me. It's a great piece of work, and really touching. As far as I can see, the entire piece was flawless; well done!! Keep writing! x |
| mizu no kokoro 2007-08-11 ch 1, | abusenicely done, i like how the rhyming doesn't get in the way of your expression. keep writing |
| Seize the Day 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abusewow, i really like this. the theme, the story within the poem, and the poem itself. great writing! |
| thyme and place 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abuseDarkly funny, i really like this one. |
| ohthevoices 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abuseI loved the first line. It was so straightforward and really drew me in. Nicely done! |
| J.L. Hastings 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abuseOh! I really liked it! Very good! I think a lot of suicidal people have this little inner argument. Great poem! |
| xfail 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is very interesting and original. I can really feel the internal struggle you've shown. Good job! |