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InSilverShadows 2008-02-29 ch 2,	abuseACK. A flaw! "He dumped the potatoes into the water and quickly washed off the dirt before leading Belaeden back inside and upstairs. He points out his room, and then the spare room – Wynnd’s old room -- across the hall. Belaeden steps inside without a word and shuts the door in Rayne’s face." There's a big tense chance in this paragraph, into the present tense. It might be because the Once a Slaves are written in the present, but anyways, this story's so good, it ought to be perfect too. :P
InSilverShadows 2008-02-29 ch 1,	abuseI'll be honest. Rayne is my favorite of all your characters, so it was delightful to get this little gem, but the title very nearly turned me off of it.
May47 2007-11-12 ch 3,	abuseI've got to say, I love reading your writing. It's sorta hard for me to get into stories, but I've really loved yours and your characters. I hope you'll continue to update this story, because I'm really liking it, and I wait patiently for your published works! Good luck with all that by the way!
SerialXLain 2007-11-10 ch 3,	abuseAw... Poor Bel... :( But Sactaren's goods (...I so got something dirty out of that...) are going to save the day right?! xo
Valerie 2007-11-08 ch 3, anon.	abuseHi! i'm a freind of Aysha (or snake in the grass) and I love all your stories, just figured i'd finally review and let you know! Keep up the good work and congrats on gettng published! -Valerie
AsiaLisek 2007-10-27 ch 3,	abuse... i'm a total fan. i love your stories, your characters, yer way of writing. when you publish, i'll be there. i. will. be. there. debit card in hand. ridiculously talented lady, hugs ~Joanna (asialisek)
SaraMaxine 2007-10-27 ch 3,	abuseOMG! yay! You rock! So, I definately love this story, as much or, surprisingly, more than Magebreak. Please update this as frequently as possible. ~You get: Pop Rocks and Coke! For if you're ever contemplating suicide.~
snarky fox 2007-10-25 ch 3, anon.	abuseOh my god! Update soon please! Oh my god, oh my god, oh my god! This is getting intense! I need more! ^^ S. fox
Amindaya 2007-10-25 ch 3,	abuseWhoa! I don't remember them mentioning that happening in the story! I must have forgotten it. Poor Bel. And Rayne is just...amazing. Yep. :)
Midnights Scream 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseSo that's how he got into Sactaren's debt. :) it's cute in a sad sort way. I really like learning more about Bel though. he's always so quiet that it's amazing whenever you get even a hint as to who he is. I love Rayne to pieces. He's so cute in a spitfire sorta way. I like that he's taking such good care of Bel even though Bel didn't pay much attention to him or treat him very kindly. :) I really like it. You're an amazing story teller and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!:)
RoseRedSnowWhite 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseHee hee hee. Awesomeness. Bel intrigues my intrest more and more every second. But...no ear...can he hear? o.O Ooh, and Rayne is headed to the magic shop, eh? That's going to be interesting. Can't wait for the next one!
lilylupin7 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseO Sactaren's about to show up! In all his evil glory...
twilights aura 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseAhh..That lifts up some of the confusion I've had of Bel for a LONG time. :)
FreezingRayne 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseOh, no. That's horrible! Poor Bel! I'm guessing this is the favor that Naeven gets sex from Rayne for. Knowing Rayne, as soon as he sees what Naeven really looks like, he'll be all over him. The only thing to correct is that you slip into present tense quite a few times. If you want, I could do the critiquing thing for this story. Read over it for you. \ Great chapter!
EverettDKearton 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseNOO! DON'T DIE BEL! DON'T DIE! (but he can't die because he's in Once A Slave :3) I've been missing your weekly updates. It makes me sad D':

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