i like it so far

Aw it was pretty short and you make me eager for more...oh ya i forgot pirates use guns...lol! Jozel is such a coward and same with the prince...LOL! Why did you choose the name Clover...it seems to American..you should take your time in this...can't wait for more...hope you actually get to finish this fic...God bless dude^_^

Good character development in this section, especially with Clover. Some quick comments on it: 'I hate you' makes it sound like these two characters have history, like there is something personal between them. If there is, great! Work that in, and add some description to how he says it. If there isn't, it would probably be better to say 'I hate your kind', or even to fling an insult.

Royalty never takes well to being bested :P, and he is in front of a man he is trying to impress (Sir Iazo)-the prince would try to save face in one way or another I think.

The only other thing is that you have Clover's thought italicized, but not Jozel's (what a brave one she was).

except > expect (p2)
more > move (p19)

Nice use of alacrity :P
-Lucas

I like the humor in the story. I laughed when I read the part of the prince saying 'I hate you' then fled. It reminds me of a bratty 10 year old. I also like how Sir Izao is suppose to be tough, but he ran off as well without even trying to fight. I like the idea. There are some parts that you should not be so straight forward with, like stating the obvious that Clover had super powers. She was able to hear through the roof, I don't think anyone can do that unless the roof is really thin, so that part was a little unnecessary, but over all I like the story a lot.
Talking about straight forwardness, I like when Clover bluntly asked the Prince 'What are you doing?' when she was the one spying. I think that kind of straight forward talk fits her character. Anyway, good first two chapters. I look forward to reading the next chapter. ^_^

Jinna

WHOA DUDE! It sounds frigin' exciting! Whoot! The suspense is killing me. Hmm the introduction is pretty convincing even though you have no clue of the places of people but somehow i can play along as if i knew each one personally. Oh my gosh! You used him...the prince...! WOOWWOWO!!LOL! Anywayz the plot is pretty good and what...super powers included? Well i hope this is not much to ask but i can you add a character of mine that is if thats aryt wif you cause i know you got the whole concept planned out already and i probably might ruin an important part.

For some reason it inspired me to write something original. I don't know what yet. I'll think about it muna...hehe! Please update me...God bless! More pirates!