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| Alenor 2008-07-18 ch 5,  | abusehmm, i'm intrigued. can't wait for more |
| Lady Katreina 2008-07-17 ch 5, | abuseO, I like the coincidence- She's pretty strong and stubborn- thank you for updating and for making this story! |
| A DreamWriter 2008-07-16 ch 5, | abuseWow, we're only on chapter five! That's some dramatic stuff. |
| Morgan Davis 2008-07-16 ch 5, | abuseok cool i thought she had really died and that would have sucked a little... post soon! |
| N.M.E 2008-07-16 ch 5, | abuseAlright! They're on the same flight! Awesome! Update soon. |
| Magdalin Fox 2008-07-15 ch 5, | abuseThis was very confusing. He killed her but he didn't kill her because he somehow missed? And I see you're continuing with the aqu eyes thing. It's really annoying... But, I dunno I'm getting a bit bored hopefully the next chapter is better. |
| abc123 chewy 2008-07-15 ch 5, | abuseAh. I really like this! You are a wonderful author and I'm greatly anticipating the next chapter. =) |
| beingmyself 2008-07-15 ch 5, | abuseGo Lily! |
| dani-sgga 2008-07-15 ch 5, | abuseOh, exciting, new chappie! I think that in this case, it would have made it more suspenseful if we did not find out that Lily survived, maybe if you leave the airplane scene until the next chapter? This way... it's like there's a hook ;) Also, one little thing I caught. At some point Dominic thinks "God hath no fury like a women’s scorn." If you are taking this line/saying commonly associated to Shakespere (though this is actually a misquotation... TRIVIAFACT!), then it's actually "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned." Toodles, love. Looking forward to the next chapter. |
| anon. 2008-07-15 ch 5, anon. | abusenice chapter, but maybe you want to fix "women" to "woman"? |
| Maria Gracia 2008-07-06 ch 4, | abuseIm really into this story!... I dont know whether she did or didnt kill them... :D I like that! |
| Alenor 2008-06-25 ch 4, | abusehmm...interesting. i can't wait for more to see what happens ~ Alenor. |
| N.M.E 2008-06-21 ch 4, | abuseVery interesting story! I like it a lot. THis has a lot of action which makes it more thrilling. Update soon please. |
| abc123 chewy 2008-06-20 ch 4, | abusevery exciting! i can't wait for the next update! |
| Lady Katreina 2008-06-19 ch 4, | abuseIt'd be interesting if you turned this into a supernatural story. Forever haunted by the innocent he killed because he wouldn't listen to her. ...THANK YOU FOR NOT MAKING THIS STORY SUPERNATURAL!! And thank you muches for updating. (I like the chase scene, I like that Lilly can defend herself.) |