 Cura 2009-07-27 . chapter 5Hello :D This is my first time ever reviewing somebody's work, or rather just leaving a comment I guess, lol. But I wanted to say I really love this story, you really have something going here. Its completely amazing, and I love the characters, it's so surreal. I really wish you would update soon :/ I think you have an amazing talent, cause I absolutely love this story. Its brilliant :] |
 vicesofvirtues 2009-06-30 . chapter 1I've read some of your old work and I have to say, your writing has improved tremendously. Before, the plot was a lot more rushed but this story moves at a nice pace, with a lot of description. I can easily imagine the story you're telling. I hope you update! |
 Night-Rayne 2009-06-16 . chapter 5oh wow, this is really good, I hope you update |
 Cris 2009-03-21 . chapter 1 aww, i'm feeling forgotten :P |
 choc me 2009-01-05 . chapter 1Hey ya! Are u planning on ever updating this story? Just curious cause I liked it. |
 The Latest Plague 2008-09-04 . chapter 5wow... crazy... how is she still okay? she got shot TWICE!! She either has some voodoo healing powers or friends in powerful places helping her. Someone must have fed the press that death story. I wonder who... I hope i'll find out soon! please try to update! for your newest fan. ;) |
 Alenor 2008-07-18 . chapter 5hmm, i'm intrigued. can't wait for more |
 Lady Katreina 2008-07-17 . chapter 5O, I like the coincidence- She's pretty strong and stubborn- thank you for updating and for making this story! |
 A DreamWriter 2008-07-16 . chapter 5Wow, we're only on chapter five! That's some dramatic stuff. |
 Morgan Davis 2008-07-16 . chapter 5ok cool i thought she had really died and that would have sucked a little... post soon! |
 N.M.E 2008-07-16 . chapter 5Alright! They're on the same flight! Awesome! Update soon. |
 Magdalin Fox 2008-07-15 . chapter 5This was very confusing. He killed her but he didn't kill her because he somehow missed? And I see you're continuing with the aqu eyes thing. It's really annoying... But, I dunno I'm getting a bit bored hopefully the next chapter is better. |
 abc123 chewy 2008-07-15 . chapter 5Ah. I really like this! You are a wonderful author and I'm greatly anticipating the next chapter. =) |
 BeingMyself 2008-07-15 . chapter 5Go Lily! |
 dani-sgga 2008-07-15 . chapter 5Oh, exciting, new chappie!
I think that in this case, it would have made it more suspenseful if we did not find out that Lily survived, maybe if you leave the airplane scene until the next chapter? This way... it's like there's a hook ;)
Also, one little thing I caught. At some point Dominic thinks "God hath no fury like a women’s scorn." If you are taking this line/saying commonly associated to Shakespere (though this is actually a misquotation... TRIVIAFACT!), then it's actually "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned."
Toodles, love. Looking forward to the next chapter. |