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| Inflaming Kaliope 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abusePerfect... your writing is amazing, and I'm not exaggerating. Everything of yours I've read has been fantastic. I love this verse: With my almost not quite red hair Blue eyes that could never Not ever in the forevers of life Be as beautifully broken blue as yours Amazing. |
| Jessie 2007-08-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseEvery one I read is more piercing and fantastic. You are so much older than I thought you were. I want to share your poems with everyone. I feel an afinity with this one specifically, although it is only the third I have read. Beautiful. So this is what you have been hiding in your quietness all these years? |
| ten bucks and a tire 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseDefinitely more gritty than a lot of your other stuff, but it still retains the usual grace. Long story short, I think this is bloody brilliant. Your writing just keeps getting better and better. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseWow, wonderfully bitter piece. You know, I was reading your profile and your note about not putting punctuation in, and I think it works with your style to not have punctuation. It's a very classical style in the sense that each line is its own thought, so I don't think you need punctuation in most cases (sometimes, there will be series in lines, like in "Love words hate words death notes and poetry" and that could use commas, and then the last line of this "Do you recognize me now" maybe could use a question mark, but I think it's actually more effective this way, because it's more of a statement, so I digress). Anyway, to the actual content of the poem. I love how you use "almost" in this, like you realize this is all just a fantasy. So nice. And I just love the line "Be as beautifully broken blue as yours" because of the insane alliteration. Hee. Keep writing! :) |
| silently watching 2007-08-07 ch 1, | abusewow...that was great...raw, honest, beautiful...you are really talented and you really should keep writing, your wor is amazing. wow, this poem was astounding. hope you are well, silently watching |
| Definition 2007-08-04 ch 1, | abuseExcuse me, I'm in awe for the moment. I cannot stress how much this piece captured my heart. Completely. The whole poem itself is just (ohsovivid) and beyond powerful//intense. The only thing I'm a little concerned about is the general flow. The flow is a bit rough in a few places. Other than that, just ... Wow. |
| SirScott 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseThere was strong emotion in this poem. This is one of the best that I have read of your poems. ~SirScott |
| Stella Grimshaw. 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseEvery subject you write you manage to make it flawless. So much envy from my part. lol. |
| Karma.Rose 2007-08-01 ch 1, | abuseas cold as raw gets. this was amazing, passionate, and hurtful at the same time. what i'd do to write something like that. it was really great, i love it. thanks. keep on writing, for my sake. well done, stella x |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-08-01 ch 1, | abuseThat was really incredible! Tragic and sad, but fascinating and very very well written. Truly excellent job, on my favorites. ~the Stranger in the moonlight~ |