I liked the beginning of the story, but it seemed like towards the end, you rushed and finished it. I realize that it was only during the course of a day, but I thik it needed a little bit more, I felt kind of ripped off.

I don't really think Melissa is pregnant, I think she's faking it, which is why she was smoking the cigarette.

Sputnik was pretty bizzare, especially when he confessed that he was having sex with his 13 year old sister! ewiie!

Other than that, it was a good story, but I just wish there was more ya know?

Hm... Ray and Eric seem rather dark... The plot is moving along well!

The cast of characters just gets more and more interesting!

Hahaha! I love that. That was great. Oh gosh, go Nick! Spit on that &^*^%$!

Alright, Sputnik is my new favorite character. The dialouge is very real and fun to read. Keep it up!

I like this. I really do. I forsee it will go great places! (Alright, I'm being corny, but you get the gist of it.)
The voice of the writing is very original, and I like how the mother plays favorites.