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| Rock Music is my Muse 2008-06-02 ch 1,  | abuseVery well written, I love the structure. |
| simpleplan13 2008-05-30 ch 1, | abuseThis was sweet and true. I liked it, even though it was a bit cliched and sugary... lol. |
| Harmonic Discord 2008-05-20 ch 1, | abuseMicely done, nicely done... I totally agree with the sentiment in this poem, and the last line is perfect. Sure, the flow at the beginning is a little bit choppy - the really long first line threw me off a bit. But hey, if the point of the poem is _imperfection_... well you have a decent excuse from the start! ;) |
| a silenced revolution 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseThought-provoking... Imperfection makes the world interesting, and a perfect world would be quite dull. Still, I have a teribly negative outlook on life and the world, and I wouldn't mind if there were less murder, violence, war, etc. It seems there's no way to win... Anyway, good poem - nice rhymes and rhythm, and message of course. |
| Lavender Dylan 2007-08-20 ch 1, | abuselol this poem actually cheered me up :D I was starting to feel all depressed about life but you really do have a point in this poem. Nice Job with this :) |
| Ammom 2007-08-18 ch 1, | abuseOoh, this is really good. It's very indepth, and opinionated. Nice... |
| Enigmatic Night 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseHey, I liked the ryhyme scheme although it was a tad bit juvenile. The poem itself transpires an uplifting message that many poems on this site fail to give. I guess it just seems to be all the rage nowadays to talk about how depressing life is and yeah it is easier. I'm guilty of said depressing poetry every now and then as well. I liked how you put the ending in italics, as a sort of breaking away from the former poem. I may be over analysing -because I usually do- but you could interpret the changing the actual font as changing of your view and going against the bleakness of the rest of the poem. "I just love it that way." Nice work. |