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| Laura Elizabeth 2008-02-12 ch 1,  | abuseI too was reminded of the hidden poem on one of the AFI tracks! It was fabulous, beautiful, and tragic all at once. Amazing job. Going in my favorites. -Laura |
| perpetual questions 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abuseI generally love apocalypse themes, but this in of itself is amazing. I don't have anything constructive to add, so I'll stop right here and favourite it. |
| too lazy to log in 2007-10-22 ch 1, anon. | abusepretty reminds me of the song but home is nowhere part 2. look up the lyrics if you don't know it. (by afie) |
| incandescente 2007-09-13 ch 1, | abuseyou're good you know. i love the imagery. i don't review cos i cannot review poetry for nuts. but you're one of the exception. just thought i'd let you know you're good. and perhaps, hopefully, make your day like how reviews make mine. hopefully. |
| sink florida sink 2007-09-03 ch 1, | abusethis is BEAUTIFUL |
| she smolders 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abuseI find it almost scary reading this right now because last week I dreamed the world was ending and I was terrified. Even so, you still manage to add beauty in it. Take care. |
| lastchance02 2007-08-17 ch 1, | abuseI love this piece so much. Like all your pieces, it doesn't fail to maintain that mysterious and melancholy edge. |
| super happy nuclear girl 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abuseGosh, you always managed to bring humanity and the profound together so nicely. I really, really love your poetry. It is sensual and dangerous and lurid in its descriptions. 'i tattoo infinity over the pulse in my wrist' - oh my god, i could just taste the skin like i was kissing it. and 'i swallowed your shrapnel' and 'you kissed the apocalypse' Seriously. This, its burning and wonderful and I love it. |
| Allis Dalline 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseI too admired the flow and sensuality of this work. I especially like the idea of the shrapnel, as it can allude to war, Armageddon in the literal sense, or to something smooth and whole that has become jagged/fragmented--or, as said in the poem, "raw and unrenewed." I think it's a great image. -Allis D. |
| freakinstoner 2007-08-09 ch 1, anon. | abusei really like this, somehow. like the way the ideas flow. good work! |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-08-05 ch 1, | abuseOh, that is beautiful. There are so many great lines in this, I don't even know where to start - "i tattoo infinity," "we held hands while the sky was falling," "you kissed the apocalypse from each of my fingertips," "you're prettier than the stars tonight." So gorgeous. It speaks of sex and drugs and rock and roll, but also of innocent love. The way you've melded the rough and the naive in this is so wonderful. Great work. Keep writing! :) |
| recycle rhymes 2007-08-03 ch 1, | abusei love the imagery. and the whole romantic concept. nice work. |
| amillionlittlepieces 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abusei never know what to say about your poetry. your words are always so serene but so sureal. beautiful. |
| Tytherpol 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseoh man, the visuals in this are great and i love the sort of quirkiness when you relate things i didn't expect. nice job. -ty. |
| mizu no kokoro 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abusewow, very sensual. the first stanza really captured the reader. keep writing |