OMG, why haven't you updated this story??!? it sounds insanely good.

Why did you stop...? *sigh* Man, I hope to read more. I want to see where you'll go with this. This story has lots of potential, and I hope it comes out of hiatus soon. Keep up the good work.

In Kelly's POV, during the car crash, if you use short, choppy sentences, I think you'll get the effect you want better.

It says "we rule the school" two or three times [i don't remember]. It's a bit repetitive and unnecessary.

It could be more descriptive.
I don't think this really gives off the mood that you want it to.
For example, when Derek crashes, he's just kind of like, "yeah, we crashed... Shane's dead."

Anywayss, I read this because I liked the idea, and it definitely has potential.

Hey there! Lucky! My parents won't pay for me to go to college, they told me I have to pay myself. Oh well, it'll be a good lesson for me. Anyway, back to the point of this review, I like this story. Can't wait to see where it goes. Hope you update ASAP. I'll be waiting!

So now that we know what's what with Derek, what's going on with Kelly?

So will the same thing happen to him??
Great job, poor Kelly :(
Ugh I understand the school thing, only a week left of vaca for me! Ick.
Good luck!
-Aria

dude that WAS EXTREMELY short. ah well, i'm glad you'll be focusing on "Crazy? You have no idea" more. hope to see another update for that one soon. thanks for the shout out! :D

-RogueRose91

Cool I like it

okay so I've finally gotten a chance to read these last two chapters. haha derek was pretty funny in the last one, freaking out about who was going to die. :P aww how sad that kelly's a ghost now..but I'm guessing it'll be pretty interesting when she meets derek. I'm sad you won't be updating this too frequently, but I'm in the same position myself now with my stories. school is going to drag me down big time this year. :( it's only been a week and I just can't wait for it to be over. oh, well. good luck with everything! :D

Ack! If that docter was real, I would hope he dies. What a jerk. It's like, he walks out of the room. "Your son is now dead because of you, what do you want to do now?" "I'm going to Disney World!" Well, anyways, good job! Love it, update soon! (:

-Gabrielle

I think the story's going pretty well. Keep 'em coming! ^.^

Aww, poor guy :(
Cant wait to see where else this goes. Love how he thought it was everyone but him!
Update soon!
-Aria

first. good chapter. but i have to comment on something, lol. you do realize that you named each sibling with a name starting with "D" lol. amusing.

second. doctor huh? kewl. maybe the next time you write the part of a doc you can base it on yourself or something. good practice eh? :P lol

-RogueRose91

very interesting..i like it so far...cant wait for more

Yeah...I see what you mean...you have caught my attention. Please update soon. This is a nice new story for fictionpress!