Reviews for Despair of Salvation

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L3G3nD 2008-03-03 ch 18,	abuseAw...Poor Rin, being mistaken as a prostitute. I wonder what's gonna happen with her? [“This is not the place to leave a thirteen-year-old girl by herself! How could you Dimitri?”] Haha, I really like this sentence. 13 year old girl, keke... Anyway nice update. Happy writing! ^.^
L3G3nD 2008-02-26 ch 17,	abuseWell done ;)
L3G3nD 2008-02-04 ch 16,	abuseLol gypsies. Their reactions were cute. Anyway, a nice chapter here. Haha. Keep writing!
RaWrZ-X3 2008-01-26 ch 9,	abuseHere, I'll just say it all in one comment! Haha, it's been a long time since I read your story! It's progressed while I was gone! Good job! It's really funny! Yay! At least your updating pretty well. Your story is a lot better than mine. XD I was thinking of redoing it, but then I'll just build up on it. Thanks for reading my story! LOL, pumpkin pie! You got great character names by the way. And I love Kahni! But Ravyn seems very bossy! Haha, well, I needa catch up with this reading! It's really good!
L3G3nD 2008-01-19 ch 15,	abuseEh well, I just drop by to leave ya a review to encourage ya to keep writing. You did it well for this chapter, and it's nice enough. I'm pretty sorry for the short review but I'm a bit rushing now (college stuff, beginning of the semester, bah!). Anyway, happy writing!
L3G3nD 2007-12-28 ch 14,	abuseWow, your story is awesome, just like how it is always. But it took you long enough for the update =/. Anyway, the humor makes me laugh, as usual. Update soon, hope it'll be an encouragement to you. ;P
L3G3nD 2007-10-19 ch 12,	abuse"magician girl shook herself like a dog." Practically, I don't think it is a good idea to use the noun, dog. Rin gives people the image of a cute but mischievous, clumsy girl, thus maybe you could replace the description with some adorable action. As for what are those gestures, I can't think of it. I'm not a girl after all! XD Moreover, the story's sense of humor is something I must mention again. I was laughing so hardly which I suffered pain around my gums (cheek bones). This chapter is hilarious almost in every aspect. The idea of using Fortune Teller is what I liked the most, due to the fact it always sparks the curiosity of readers. There was once a story, it ended up with a 'Future-Seeing', or a short glimpse by a character into the world's future. What's disheartening was it ended just like that, and remained not update for like ages. I almost died from the cliff-hanging back then. The reason I told you these was I thought the idea of ending your story where the three parted from the fortune teller's shack would be an interesting idea. I mean, personally I'm being drawn into the story by anticipating the future (in future chapters) and keep reading. That was just my idea after all. I figured there's an important style of your story - simple and funny. Hehe. Gave a long review, I was in the review-mood today! Hopefully you'll reply me a message stating what you think about my feedback, or at least? Sorry if I sounded pushy.
L3G3nD 2007-10-08 ch 11,	abuselol how funny this chapter turns out to be! Two annoying dudes, Dimtri and the Salvation Sword, lol arguing with each other. Haha, seriously can't stop laughing over the conversation between both of them. I really like your sense of humor, so keep it up! XD
L3G3nD 2007-09-26 ch 10,	abuselol mission impossible. haha inserting modern issues to a fantasy story as a humor, tat's great! xD well there's nth much to pinpoint here. but i want to say smth which is, I like the part which Dimitri seemingly possessed by his own sword (how wicked I am). It rises a lot conflict to me as I thought the sword itself should be mercy or some sort...haha but it's just a personal opinion! keep the update and I want to read more.
L3G3nD 2007-09-24 ch 9,	abusehehe. let me leave you another review. As i progress, there are certain parts which makes me laugh, really. I mean, its hilarious. Rin's sort of those blur and yet innocent type girl. And the bar fight makes Kesto even more interesting. Keep the update. I'd like to see how Dimitri's crush ended up. Haha.
L3G3nD 2007-09-24 ch 4,	abusehi, let me point out a few things from my progress of reading your story so far out. the obvious one to me is of about Rin. I figured she's somehow, indirectly ignoring the two guys' questions. I mean, they're asking about one thing, and the reply she gave them was another, some sort of irrelevant. I'm not sure if it's your character's traits, but it makes me feel uncomfortable sometimes. but regardless of that, I think there wasn't much flaws. I didn't meant to offend you, but it's a nice story. I enjoyed reading it, but bear me if I'm writing with a lot grammar mistakes. don't worry. keep it up! i'll be looking forward for it.
RaWrZ-X3 2007-08-29 ch 7,	abuseGreat story! it's really unique! how will he save the village? will she stay purple? keep it up! can't wait till chapter 8!
RaWrZ-X3 2007-08-15 ch 5,	abuseHow are they going to get in? What is the village going to be like? Can't wait till next chapter!
RaWrZ-X3 2007-08-15 ch 3,	abuseThis chapter was good! They met a magician! Can't wait for next chapter!
RaWrZ-X3 2007-08-10 ch 2,	abuseWho screamed! What's happening? Can't wait till next chapter! Looking forward! ^_^

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