Reviews for World Chicken: A Libertine

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Lydia Gaby 2008-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abusei absolutely loved your story, I read it like 90 trillion times and i'm so glad ur getting published Best of luck Peace23
monster dia 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abusei wish you nothing but good luck on the publication. i hope it all works out. and i wanna read it when it's actually published in the magazine. that way, i can be all like, I READ THIS BEFORE IT WAS OFFICIALLY PUBLISHED~
the pirateKing 2008-04-23 ch 1,	abuseClicking the link, this would have been, in fact, my third time reading about Roman! I'm really excited you've decided to publish the story, it beats the hell out of all those other novels. Hey, at least you know you have a fan right here, hey?
Penance for her sins 2007-09-21 ch 17,	abuseHey, I am back for my daily dose of Roman. You know, because a little of him, once a day, keeps my appetite away. It’s completely okay, three square meals a day is so overrated. About your author’s note, my best friend is Trinidadian, but his mom and the majority of his family are originally Indian. I will try to ask my main ‘hash brown’ those questions for you. His replies will probably be lame as hell though. His uncle gave him flavored condoms. That sent a shiver down my spine, for me that was more than kind of creepy information. The rest of this chapter was wholesome for the most part, definitely the same vibe I get when I go to my mate’s house. Good job on that, his dad drops dirty jokes more than Bush drops bombs, and his mom stuffs me full, because she tells me I look like I just escaped Auschwitz. No words can describe my love for Bollywood! I watch Indian movies all time, I don’t really understand them, with the random singing, and dancing—but the overall experience is really entertaining. God, please not Saraswati's mom—really hope that was sarcasm. ‘I waxed my car down with love and wide, Karate Kid strokes.’—Ha, you really have a way with words, but you probably hear that all the time. I also like Roman’s mom, cool woman. I was rather bummed out there was not more Justos in this chapter, but well rounded chapter overall. You managed to take the reader many places, and meet up with many characters.
Penance for her sins 2007-09-19 ch 16,	abuseI may not quite see my own works through, but I should at least try to finish other highly motivated people’s works.In that spirited, I am back like I left something behind. ‘A good guy with six kids and a wife with a terminal illness is just God's sense of humor, I guess.’--Word to Sesame street’s big bird, that is real honesty right there. I felt so incredibly bad reading that about Chuck’s wife, as if all this was real. "There are so many blacks around here," mom said and looked around.—I think there is supposed to be the word ‘the’ in front of ‘mom said’ here. I do not know it rather made it shortly confusing without word ‘the’, as if he was talking about his own mother and not the matriarch of the family moving in. "Until Haiti becomes an inudstrialized power, I'm gonna let my hair grow out."—ha, ha so he’s totally going to be cousin ‘It’ from the Adams family soon. If they are teaching me right at university, there is no chance in hell that is happening in this eon. "I don't want my brother and sister learning this."Silence.—this was so hysterical, you are funny, and not in that stupid accidental, way I kind of am. Justos—that poor bloke for that nastiness to happen right under his nose and in his own place too. This was another nice chapter!
faerie-gumdrops 2007-09-17 ch 1,	abuseHey, sorry, I took much longer than I'd planned to reply (especially seeing as I actually read this chapter a week ago! I am a rubbish reviewer). I want to give a really smart review to repay the favour properly and give some constructive criticism but, hell, you're just too clever for me, and you're a much better writer! So anyway, first off, I really like the fact that this is a male POV story, simply because they're such a rare find on fictionpress, where nearly all the first person narrators are whiny teenage girls (I'm very guilty of this!) which can get kind of annoying quite quickly, so it's great and reassuring to find some originality out there. Also, your writing style is so natural, and the narration is very realistic, like you've obviously thought a lot about the way Roman (I'm assuming this is him talking?) would see the world and the way that he'd describe it. Ugh, I'm so fricking envious! Roman's an interesting character too. I guess I haven't really seen enough of him yet to work him out, but I like how he's so conscious of how he wants to be seen. Really interesting how he likes to admire parts of himself that aren't there etc, like he kind of wishes, but also kind of believes, that he's a cooler looking person than he actually is - sorry if I'm completely wrong there, I'm a bit of an idiot sometimes. I love the relationship between him and Juliet, and I like how she's so unavailable to him, and the end where he tries to get her out of his system. Anyway, I really like this story so far, it's so original, funny and written really well. I'll definitely read more when I get the time!
monster dia 2007-09-15 ch 22,	abuseOh, man. This story was Love.
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 16,	abuseI hadn't planned on reviewing this chapter because I was tired as hell, but when I read it I couldn't resist. That is so offbeat it isn't even... well, actually, it is funny. It's funny in a... an offbeat way hahahaha. Sorry this was short =/
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 15,	abuseGood Line: "Stop projecting. You asked what I thought. Don't confuse us." Woo-hoo I love Alex too. I like jerks from stories too golly I love Roman man. LOVE THIS LINE: "No, just stop. I don't want it. I worship myself enough. I know I'm ** awesome, but don't attach morality and feelings or any of that crap to it. It offends me." This is such an awesome line. It totally does an awesome job mixing Roman's sarcastic douchebag side with his dude-inherited-super-deep insight on things. It's the lines like this (and a couple littered around this chapter) that really make me like his character. He's obviously very intelligent but still very human. Jane clearly has some issues. "You just wanted to see what it was like to have sex with your ex's older brother. Big deal. If you add more stuff to it, you're just lying to yourself. Take it for what it is." Jeez I love this guy.
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 14,	abuseIs Winston with a trans? That'd be funny as hell. LMAO when I read this line: "Give me my sister, **bag. I know karate." That was hella karate-ish right there... bitchslappib galore. I like what Winston said - or tried to say - to Roman. It's really chummy but not super emotional and Roman didn't like, break down and start moaning about how nobody understands and stuff. And the whole Roman-Carla thing is cute, I think. At this point, however the story ends, whether they're together or not would be a good ending because it's realistic. It won't be from like totally left field, y'know?
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 13,	abuse... so Roman doesn't like her concern? Sorry this is a short review but that's all I was really thinking. And no, I'm sorry, but my monitor has not yet felt the pangs of being yelled at. Maybe the next chapter?
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 11,	abuseI just finished reading the first few paragraphs and I had to admit to myself that I LOVE how Roman is really dude-ish and still quasi-thoughtful. He can be really thoughtful without seeming (pardon my French) faggoty. LMAO: Just his brains, I thought. Get him good and his brains out. Roman's got a good idea on how to hook a guy for a few minutes. I like Rick but if he really stressed about how he lost his virginity then... golly, he's sensitive. I dunno, I guess I'm sorta careless if a guy does it. "I seriously didn't know my brother was a bi-polar nut. He's still a good kid and everything, but damn." I knew it. I knew it all along. Rick is bipolar, I swear. And Winston is a.) very hard to read and b.) must have a highpitched voice. I love him though. And I like how the chapter ended - if he's going to go after Ini, then power to Roman hahaha
Loly Darko 2007-09-15 ch 10,	abuseI'm trying to pronounce "Saraswati" and can't help but feel like I'm saying it wrong (Sara-Swat-ee?). Oh well. I like how Roman has like his thing for Sara and Carla - it's more realistic considering his character. I'd be surprised if he just up and fell steady with ONE girl. I think I get what happened in this chapter... I hope I got it alright. It probably just sort of flew over my head because I'm tired. It's not the continuity or anything, though so don't worry hahaha it's nothing in the writing. I love Dog's name. I'm pretty sure you've mentioned it before but I just thought you should know that. I have a cat named "Kittey", so I can easily understand the hardcore creative process that goes into naming an animal after its species. And Roman's name is Gabriel Roman (or vice-versa) right? I met a guy in real life with that name! Cool. I learned how to pronounce it, too (I've been being a lazy slack-jawed idiot and thinking "Row-man") so now I really like his name and it makes his character a lot more likeable hahaha.
eurtreve 2007-09-13 ch 2,	abuse"Great going. You sat on the Ruffles." i laughed very, very, very hard.
BKGal-24 2007-09-13 ch 1,	abuseHOLY MOTHER THERESA! I can't believe I've gone this long without reading your stuff. Do you know I secretly worship you? Next to God and Jesus and all, but seriously...you rock my lame husband-who-got-deported world. Be back late-ah.

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