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| JordiiGirl 2008-07-13 ch 5,  | abuseMysterious ending... I enjoyed this story, it was great! A beta would of made it better though, but it's still awesome. |
| JordiiGirl 2008-07-13 ch 4, | abuseAw, Remiel is so sweet! Is he going to die?? The story is a bit fast, but it's still really good. |
| JordiiGirl 2008-07-13 ch 2, | abuseYay, good amount of character development here! Zoran seems like an interesting character, has a nice twist! |
| JordiiGirl 2008-07-13 ch 1, | abuseThe names are really creative! But still sound like /real/ names, so that is fantastic. I'm liking the vampire thing here, I need a good vampire story... I don't understand some parts though, but at this moment (seeing as it's the first chapter) I won't stress that because my questions might be explained later - so for now, I'm liking the story! |
| what.the.pants 2008-07-07 ch 5, | abusegood story. the middle was a little confusing, but overall good. the plot was a little rushed and could be drawn out more. |
| CrimsonxShadows 2008-07-05 ch 5, | abuseI really enjoyed this story! Although, I was a little disappointed-and confused-with the way the end turned out. That's okay, though. I understood it for the most part. It was amazing, and I loved your descriptions and original pieces of vampirism. Very awesome! I'll be checking out other stories of yours as well! |
| Denimcollie 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseZoran reminds me of Zordon from the Mighty Morphin Power Rangers, but I love the names you use! |
| Dragon Soarer 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseI don't have time to finish reading your story right now, but I probably will tomorrow. So far it's very good! Lots of details, descriptive writing... it's very well writen and the ideas are really good. I like the names too. Overall, you are a far better writer than I am. (I am actually surprised that you liked my story beginning [The Last Dragon]). Anyway, have a good day, and keep up the good writing! |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-04-20 ch 5, | abuseAw so it did go somewhere better, nice ending. |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-04-20 ch 4, | abuseOh no! Zoran gets Aurora again, that's just too horrible. I'm hoping this goes somewhere better next chapter. I think that this story is going a bit fast, I'd like it more fleshed out and detailed, but that's probably just my taste. |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-04-20 ch 3, | abuseThis chapter was very dramatic and engaging. The only bit I thought slightly awkward was, "Can anyone guess who Remiel is to Zoran" it just stuck out a bit, I don't know why. Maybe it's because the rest of it was told from Aurora's point of view and then you suddenly switched to narrator and it didn't fit in? Well, apart from that very nice chapter. |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-04-20 ch 2, | abuseThis chapter had more errors than the last one, but they were minor and you compensated by developing the characters more. Very good. |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseThat was a really interesting and well written, if short first chapter. I like the idea of a vampire drinking a Hunterr's blood and therefore owning them it's very interesting. |
| DJ DJ 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseThis soundes like it has a great plot but it has a lot of spelling mistakes in it other than that it's great |
| K.B. and C.B. 2008-03-10 ch 5, | abuseAw...How sweet! It was amazing! I can't wait to read more of your works! -K.B. |