Reviews for Diabolical Retribution

hey ho that rhymes with mo
2007-09-02
ch 1, anon.

abuseHey ho. I miss you. Yup. I truly do. Especially since you haven't been on at all, and tomorrow, we're leaving for Mexico. So I can go connect with my nonexistent roots.

I don't know if I'll have the time to write a werewolf story, especially since I want to write one on the shit hole I call my life, because it makes for good drama, and I now have enough experience with assholes to make it believable. In fact, several times, I have considered punching said asshole named Cameron Hill. He likes to talk about me behind my back, about how mean I am to my boyfriend, and how he's just a rebound guy because I really still want Cameron. Oh, and I do believe he complained and recited our whole conversation about the day after he got into his accident, and he ended up pissing me off, so I told him to get overhimself. He was all like 'Who in the hell says that?'. So, everyone else recited it. Laugh worthy stuff right there. I bet you're just enjoying my angst. Because I know you, it' something you enjoy. Sadistic bitch.

Anyway, I'm gonna feature Cameron in my new story about assholes. Haven't decided his name, but I'm gonna go back to some old choices and use Ansley and Gretzsky. I think I'll kill Cameron off, or something. He deserves it.

Oh, Cassie thinks Cameron and I will end up together because we have this 'love/hate' relationship, when in reality, it's purely a relationship of hatred on the inside and amiable facade on the outside.

Meh, I hate guys. Seriously, I've decided to cut my contacts down to Layton, Dan the Man, and Russell. Those are the only guys I am willing to talk to. Yes. The others *cough*Zac, Zac, & Cameron*cough* can fuck off. Along with the random people I meet along the way. Psh. Damn men.

Oh, on the bright side, I've decided to either get a ferret named Musket, or write about one that tries to act like a dog. Then one of the characters is gonna have a cat named moose. I think it's awesome, so you can shove it. Shove it. Shove it. Shove it.

I need to write a murder story so I can kill off Cameron. Or he can get hit by a drive by trucker.

All I need is a plot. Hmm.

I think I want to write a story about the faithless, doomed to go to hell. Or something just kickass.

God, I haven't wrote in forever. I am a horrible person.

I've been uninspired.

People are forcing a life on me.

Not fun. At all.

They actually make plans with me and yell when I want to cancel. Damnholes.

Haha.

So obviously I'm bored.

But I should stop.

Before I you kill me.

Hmm, I do this on messenger.

It pisses people off because they have no time to respond.

And have like twenty things of random posts.

Involving butt fucking a hippo.

Or a giraffe.

But I am done.

Seriously.

Good bye.

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D.E. Sinatra
2007-08-27
ch 1,

abuseI enjoyed the style in which this was written. The vindictive and bitter tone of the narrator is portrayed nicely. You revealed just the right amount of detail to the reader to have them wondering what is going on - in a very good way. Nice work!

Keep writing :).

~Dee

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