I like this one better--especially that ending. Great job!

~Twilight Starr~

Good poem. Nice title.

~Twilight Starr~

I like the rewrite better. But Only because it gives more than the first. I don't like the idea that almost every sentence starts with 'I'.

I think the first one's better, but simply for the fact that every line doesn't start with 'I'.

I guess I like the second version better. I think both seem a little slow and choppy in the middle because so many lines begin with "I see". Both were good poems, though, and I really liked the idea.

This will go to my faves archive!

They were similar, but I think I like the latter.
Yes, we always look in the mirror and do all sorts of things. Perhaps you do see differently to the norm which makes it interesting.
Some of it was a little confusing and tangled. Was this the purpose of the distort?
Anyhow. Cheers.
Perhaps you should stick with the one you like best instead of giving too anyway.