Wow good job! There is a lot of raw energy and anger in this, you can feel it in the words.
"slit throat disaster
drunk pills laughter
broken heart shatter"
These lines stood out to me. I liked them and the whole thing as a piece.

THIS IS AWESOME.
YOU AS A WRITER IS AWESOME.
your rhymes are contagious and the message is clear. loveitloveitloveit
+faves!

LOVE this! Could so see it turning into a song.

You've stripped anger down to the core. This is so hardcore, so raw and brutal.

The repetition is excellent. It really emphasizes your point and feeling. Nice!

I love the raw anger in this - Really, I loved that you got this angry, it was like your thoughts were just flying from your head, to your mouth, to the page, it was thrilling. Wonderful work. Real, and emotional (the best kind of poetry.) Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.

Oh this one made me smile. Vengeful, hateful, with a lighter sarcastic side. I had a horrible day and this is just what I needed.

~Ericaskyy

As always, your poetry has such feeling. So many raw emotions. I hope no one in particular inspired this...:\

I like this. The feeling is very strongly expressed.