aww that was so cute =] i like how u did like...hm i don't know the word for it. well i like how u had it end like the beginnig. does that make sense? if not sorry!

Aww... so cute. :D So glad Mizz-Insane discovered this and suggested it to me! :D *adds to c2*

Well, we're all improving and learning as we go so no worries. Have some confidence.
Some realistic portrayals. Some good ideas.
The intro this way was a tad more interesting than the norm, but it could be pushed that bit more.
Good use of italics.
Could make do with more descriptions about the characters thoughts/feelings/emotions and their appearance/setting.
Anyhow. Cheers.

Aw, that was so cute...

I really liked this, it is how you would expect your best friend, who has always liked you, to ask you out, but it never happens.

You advertised me! You're my hero!

Oh, and this one-shot is to damned cute! I love it! It's going on my favorites!