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Laundry and Prayer
HGiel
2007-08-05 . chapter 1
This was sweet, very simple and nice. I hadn't ever read a story with a laundry theme before either~
concerto49
2007-08-05 . chapter 1
Bold the title perhaps?
Could do with a touch of dialogue.
Some good imagery.
Need more on thoughts/feelings/emotions of persona.
Some of the sentences need more work on, but generally okay.
Anyhow. Cheers.
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