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| Twilight Starr 2007-10-24 ch 1,  | abuseAwesome poem. ^^ ~Twilight Starr~ |
| felicia13 2007-08-07 ch 1, | abuseJust a question: "Not heavy like led," Heavy like lead? The way you have it doesn't really make sense. Other than that, it's great. Like a whole bunch of one moment. I love those. The ending's the best. Great imagry throughout. I can really see this scene. Quiet and everything fits perfectly together. The tone, word choice, and imagry all combine beautifully. Felicia. |