This is such a complex, deep subject that I can't help but be pleasantly surprised at how well you pulled it off. I hope you don't take this as mindless praise, but I truly think that your quality of writing is the one many people strive to achieve.

the last line... perfect. that just stood out for me. "i find you in this silence". and the style of it, how it tapers out then back in, makes it all the more effective, especially since it ends with that line, like it all depends on that. great work.

M, I love the last line of this. I don't know why; I just really like the way it sounds. Simple, but nicely worded. Keep writing! :)

Wow, this poem completely describes this girl that I used to know in the fifth grade. The way you wrote this challenges people to read between the lines. Good Job with this.

Wow. Your words are intricately wrapped in meaning and images, a complex little punch of truth. Nice work!

abby