Reviews for My Phantasmagoria

Dodge
2007-08-06
ch 1,

abuseHey,

Cute story. I liked the idea and the title sounded really cool. I think it would have sounded even better if you cut of the "My" and just made it "Phantasmagoria".

You had some cool imagery and you had a pretty interesting symbolic moment at the end, there. I think the story has a hole here and there, though. I think you need more backstory so you can give the end a more profound point from an emotional view.

Also, you did incorporate some feeling into the story but I think you could have done more which would have given it a more powerful feel.

Good idea and interesting take though. I assume there are going to be more scenes in this story since Phantasmagoria is a "shifting series"?

~Dodge

gn0sis
2007-08-06
ch 1,

abuseWell written. I don't think it deserves the T rating it's given, though.

Return to Top