This was really good. Is it a oneshot? Anway, it's a really good story and I love the way you wrote it. Great job.

No offense I think that this story has been done before by Stephen King. Its called Insomnia and its all about an old man named Ralph that after his wife dies has terrible insomnia and starts to get a sixth sense. He can see demons and things people have done wrong in thier life. Not saying you copied the story but its weridly almost the same story...

Wow... that was a really interesting read. I love this writing style... it's so simple, but manages to be mysterious at the same time. I can relate to this story on some level, being an insomniac myself; you portrayed the plight of an insomniac very well.

If I had to criticize anything, I suppose it would be that some of the sentences seem to drag on a little too long. Other than that, it's perfect, and you did a great job.