 The Abstract Dualist 2007-08-24 . chapter 1Well, it's...fine. I mean, I don't read screenplay much (could you define "intercut" please? I assume that means that means that both are sharing the screen, but I'm not sure...) but that seems pretty good. But, um, short. I've also never seen words like "blasting" in all caps before, but meh. That doesn't matter half as much.
But it's so short... |