Aw. Sweet. I'd like to know more!

Interesting approach and writing style. Unique. I like the syle, though I think it may be best for short stpries rather than long ones.

Well, it's...fine. I mean, I don't read screenplay much (could you define "intercut" please? I assume that means that means that both are sharing the screen, but I'm not sure...) but that seems pretty good. But, um, short. I've also never seen words like "blasting" in all caps before, but meh. That doesn't matter half as much.

But it's so short...

I've never read a play before, but I liked it.