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Alteng 2007-08-20 ch 1,	abuseI finally got around to reading this. It has been cooking here literally. We've had a couple of days of 100 plus weather here. So, I haven't felt much like reading. Anyway, I like Mad Jack the way he is. He sounds like a fun fellow. This can be a truly frightening experience for him. Perhaps there is another memory mage involved. Strangely enough Jack reminds me of your description of odders. I look forward to see what terrors await here.
Multicolored Berry 2007-08-11 ch 1,	abuseOh, an insane, dangerous criminal! Wonderful! Your introduction of Jack is quite inspired. Very clear imagery. My only complaint with this bit of work would be that "Mad Jack" is just such a boring, typical name. But, it is just the name, so it can't have much relevance to the story. I'm sure I'll get over it. The program sounds like it'll be hell for your character. What fun! I'ma looking forward to your next update.
Angel 2007-08-09 ch 1, anon.	abuseOMG (G standing for "goodness", of course)! I'M REVIEWING! ARE YOU HAPPY NOW, YOU--YOU--YOU-- ... Well, I'm not gonna give you the satisfaction of reading me curse, so HA! Anyways... Nothing I haven't told you before, either through AIM or email. Good start, nice character, love the skunk spot of mystery, like how he described his victims, the fact that he expected to be dead by now, and the fear and outrage he has upon realizing he's getting put in a program instead of getting put to death. Also like the general's reaction to this fact. “You are the biggest criminal in the underground…and we are putting you in a program.” He sighed and rubbed his forehead. And the last line seems to sum things up quite nicely... Almost makes you feel sorry for Jack. All in all, a nice chapter. Like I've told you before. For this chapter...and for so...many...others... And that's all I have to say. No constructive criticism. I SUCK AT CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM! YOU KNOW THAT! GAH!
E.S. Lundgren 2007-08-07 ch 1,	abusewow, that's so cool. i'm loving this plot so far, awesome character introduction, if all the other characters are as interesting as this guy, then i hit a jackpot. keep it up, i look forward to more!

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