You need to lengthen this up a bit, edit for errors, and get it published. That is all.

Once again, I'm blown away.
I love your work! I really hope there's one about Christi and Muck =]
The only other character whose name was Muck was an awful disgusting mean evil man, but apparently this one's a heart of pure gold =) I'll probably start reading tomorrow if I can restrain myself tonight =p

AHAHAHA, when he said more cushion, I died laughing. That was great, another superbly written story!

*tear* I'm not going to lie, I think I always liked Rakyr better than Will. And I'm glad that they finally ended up together. :D

I think I like Efrem. A lot.

Okay, so I was seriously laughing my butt off when they explained the third trial.

I have to say, I'm a little more interested in what happens to Rakyr and Ilana more than what happens to Amy and Nick. But I'm reading it all in order, just so I don't miss anything. :)

So I think you should rename this chapter Denial.

Funny story: I was reading this story while listening to a Paramore song. It's called "Ignorance" and the lyrics were perfect for Amy's frame of mind in this chapter. Seriously, it was kind of creepy how well it fitted. You should look them up.

Yay!

I don't know...I think you should've really put Nick through the grinder ;)

oh.my.god.
That was just so CRUEL!

I am just amazed at the variety and diversity of your characters. It's amazing. I personally find the Leandra/Oliver subplot hilarious, although I'm not sure if it was meant to be. Ah, beautiful melodrama.

I'm not sure if you made up that story about the light and dark, but if you did it was very clever and sweet!

Here's what I can't figure out: how did Ariella, Demi, and Rakyr all get from Galatea to Shayark? Did Jak and Daric go back and transport them? Because nothing was ever mentioned about The Stormin' Harlot returning to Galatea, and Amy is with her boat in Shayark, and the only other person with wind powers is with her... So I don't see how they got from place to place. They kind of just...appeared.

I just realised how much i love Amy's grandfather. Even though he's not in the stories that much he's got loads of them together and i love that he's all gruff and angry but has a huge heart underneath. I think he was a genius character to create, with all his not-so-subtle matchmaking deeds :D

This is beautiful, just like all of your stories. :)