Haha, I've read this first part and it's still just as funny and awkward as I remember it. I hope he didn't put the darn things on backwards, but I guess if he did, it doesn't matter. I've a feeling they won't be on for much longer.

The only thing I might suggest here is to find a different way to describe his hot bod other than "the view". While yes, effective (creepy nod), you used it twice I think. Lessee, what else could we use to say "hawwt nekkidness"? I'll have to get back to you on that one...(daydreams)

Well, your dialogue is very nice, and flowy and--BLAHGARKOHMIGOD! Wowzee, that's a really big paragraph! It's all good, as far as content goes, but you have to break this sucker up because it's too much to swallow in one piece. Whether you want to make it into paragraphs while he tells his story or have Rhea make festive interjections (maybe explain why she was on the jetty a litte more? like, descriptions from her pov? unless that's taking away from aengus's thing, then ignore me), both sound feasible. I know you worked ** this monologue (m Sondre), and it's really good. It's just really big.

Yes, that's what she said. Okay, we can all be twelve.

Okay, and the following dialogue is v. good, though reading it I was shaking my head (which is fine, b/c come on, it's me. girl with heart of graphite), but just because it was so romantic.

Erm, when he got rid of his hair, did he have to like, surrender his eyebrows too? Am I thinking too deeply about this? Heh, it's a good thing he came to shore when he did; bald is apparently in now.

Hah, love the last line. Good stuff, definitely worth the wait.

H.

Hmm...what kind of career do you think he'd pursue on land? He'd be a kickass snow crab fisherman, but I hear that's like the #1 dangerous job in the world, so nix that. Underwear model, then?

hehe, I like this start. It's like Naked Guy in gilmore girls. Marty...

This is a very nice beginning, and I definitely want to know what happens next. Very nice descriptions, I think you've painted the atmosphere just right, without being too flowery with the language, which is awesome in my book. Heh, you're such a romantic, but at least I know we weren't bodyswapped.

H.