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| Dexterity 2007-12-16 ch 2,  | abuseInteresting story you've got there. I like how you made the little girl so mysterious. I'll be patiently waiting for more, so please update soon! Please take a looky at my story if you have time. I really want to see how I can improve my writing. Thanks for the beautiful story. Keep up the good work! |
| Jinebiebe 2007-08-16 ch 2, | abuseAmazing chapter. I love the descriptions and introduction of what the little girl really is. There were some grammar mistakes here and there, so you may want to read over it again and fix them, other than that, well done. I’m hoping the dog will end up being alright. ^_^ Can't wait for the next. Jinna |
| Jinebiebe 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseI love mysteries! Very good first chapter. I love how simple the story starts out and then becomes mysterious when Ana opens that box. It sort of reminds me of Pandora's Box. I have so many questions running through my mind at the moment. I also love the cliffhanger. I love the magic of the whole thing. I'm trying to think of constructive criticism, but I can't. So far your story has good characters, good flow and a nice feeling. I really can't wait to read the next chapter. Jinna |